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2008 年 4 月 17 日  星期四   晴天


2008-04-17 分類: [生活]

今天整理電腦內的資料時,找到之前的一個file

AFS  

那段時間..真是忙得連貓手也想借了(日本諺語)

不過現在想起來還是滿懷念的

我打開了那一封寫給host family的信,算自薦信吧 就給大家看一下吧 嘿^^

要是平常的英文作文也可以像這樣有心機就好了....

其實寫自己,很有難道呢.自己可能最了解自己的感覺自己的想法自己的心意

但自己的為人,性格,交際 是好是壞  還是朋友最清楚

不知你們覺得寫成怎麼呢,希望你都同意我所寫出來的自己吧

Dear host family, 

 

    I am glad to have this opportunity to introduce myself to you. My

name is Robin Cheung Yan Wun, I’m 16 years old girl from Hong Kong,

and I was born in Hong Kong and grow up here.

 

 

    I live with my parents, 2 brothers and 2 cats. Although my family is

not rich we are very happy and close. I am the one who always give

many ideas in the family. For example where to spend our family day,

what to cook for our meals and or how to decorate our house during

Christmas. My parents teach me a lot of knowledge that cannot find in

the books, I would seek advice from my parents about spending of

money.For example, is the price reasonable for a book like this?

Every time I think the price is fine, they usually think that it is

expensive.Another thing I would seek advice is my school work

and future which is very important to me and them.

 

 

     In school, I get along with my classmates, usually I am one of the

activities organizers. Like class singing contest, I help my class to

proceed practice, I am also the host of game on the school

Christmas party. I joined two different kinds of club in school,

volleyball team and art club. I love sport and art! Every time I play

volleyball I feel free and happy, what a great exercise! I make new

friends too. Art, any kind of handicraft; drawing; photography……

are also my hobbies.

 

    My friend describe me as an optimistic and enthusiastic person,

actually I also think it that way. Every time when I have gathering with

friend or relatives, I would like to create the relaxing and cheerful

atmosphere. Besides, I am a frank and open girl, I express my feeling

easily, I don’t like to keep it in heart, but I know sometimes I need to

endure not to speak out. I like things goes straightforward, a deadlocked situation feels not good.

   

     Last year, my art teacher asked students to make an art work that

the theme is develop by ourselves, each student can have their own

ideas. At that time I had an idea to make a full set clothes, it is a big

challenge to me, but I really want to try it. This is a good chance to

me, course I want to be a fashion designer! I want to have my own

brand; my own shop in my future. Finally I finished a full set of clothes

successfully. I am very happy that my final product was praised by

people, they even do not believe that it was made by me.

    I have many different kinds of interests, like taking photos, I always

do it, and before I join a photography activity; I love origami, Origami

means make an art work by folding paper, it is amazing. In addition, I

love playing volleyball and reading books. Playing with pets is also my

interest, I always chat with my lovely cats, and they are good listener.

 

 

 

    I apply AFS program, course I really want to know more about other

countries, I want to get more experiences and it is interesting to learn

different culture. I hope this program enable me to meet new friends,

strengthen my self-confidence, and learn to be an independent person.

 

 

    Although I do not know who will read this letter, I do believe destiny.

I am waiting to see you soon!

  

                                                               Cheer!

  

                                                                           Cheung Yan Wun

                                                                    29 Feb 2008

   

   

有能耐看完- -?

 

 






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金 於 2008-04-19 10:36 AM 發表:
woo..聲爺幫我指出左我睇到既錯處了
連我都睇到有錯處
最明顯
what to cook for our meals and or how to decorate our house during

Christmas
and同or 我認為可以del一個..
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= ="
 
and or  係可以一齊同的
Posted at 2008-04-19 11:35 AM   [ 編輯 ] [ 刪除 ]



sing 於 2008-04-17 11:45 AM 發表:
有人贊美,那我也一定要批評批評。
信件質素很好,一般文法錯誤均能避免,惟以下各點需加注意:
1. I am (a) 16 years old girl from Hong Kong, and I was born in Hong Kong and grow(grew) up here(there).
2. what to cook for our meals and or(or) how to decorate our house during Christmas.
3. My parents teach me a lot of knowldege that can not find(be found)in the books.
4. for example, is the price resonable for a book (like this)?
5. usually, I am one (am eager to play me role as one )of the activities organizers.
6. any kind(kinds) of handicraft.
7. My friend(friends) describle me as an optimistic and enthusiastic person.
8. Every time when I have gathering(gatherings) with friend(friends) or relatives. I would like to create the(a) relaxing and cheerful atmosphere.
9. I like things goes(going) straight forward, a deadlocked situation feels not good(to me).
10.Last year, my art teacher asked students to make an art work that the theme is develop(developed) by ourselves.
11. This is a good chance to me, course(cos) I want to be a fashion designer!
12. Origami means make(making) an art work by folding paper.
13. I always chat with my lovely cats, and they are good listener(listeners).
14. I want to get more experiences and know different culture(cultures).
15. I do believe (in) destiny.
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哇!不會吧..Miss Ng 幫我睇過封信...都冇咁多...mistakes...
有好多都係我唔小心而錯
不過...第2,4句 Miss Ng話ok喎..
第5句..仲係Miss 幫我改tim...
 
哈,不過都唔該你啦
睇泥你對英文好有興趣,
連人地既日記都用來做proof reading
XD
 
 
 
 
 
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Cole 於 2008-04-17 01:49 AM 發表:
原來你係寄住係人地度。
封信幾好丫
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係呀,thx
Posted at 2008-04-17 12:11 PM   [ 編輯 ] [ 刪除 ]


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