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The weather is especailly hot today.One day, when i was walking in the hot, i said to myself,'All my life, i have been having difficulty in studying. No matter how hard i try, i see myself a failure. It is not in my power to improve my public examination performance. What will i be next year?' I never wish to live in luxury, nor do i want to live in poverty.I just want to live in comfort without much difficulty.I want to a living without great distresses.In order to improve this, i had already asked advice of many teachers and friends. Its a shame that i couldnt do it.
The weather is especailly hot today.One day, when i was walking under the sun, i told myself,'Throughout my life, i have been having difficulty in studying. No matter how hard i try, i see myself a failure. It is not in my power to improve my public examination performance. What will i be next year?' I never wish to live in luxury, nor do i want to live in poverty.I just want to live in comfort without much difficulty.I want to a living without great distress.In order to improve this, i have already asked advice of many teachers and friends. Its a shame that i cannot do anything. | ||
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海怡 於 2007-07-22 11:38 AM 發表：
hi, http;//blog.qooaz.hk/k7k9072
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j... 於 2007-07-19 05:54 PM 發表：
The weather is especially* hot today.One day, when i was walking in such a hot weather*, i told* myself,'Throughout* my life, i have been facing* difficulties* in studying. No matter how hard i try, i see myself a failure. It is not in my power to improve my public examination performance. What will i be next year?'
I never wish to live in luxury, nor do i want to live in poverty.I just want to live in comfort without many difficulties*(i think it is plural here, not sure though).I want to lead a life* without great distress(distress is uncountable).In order to improve my life*(i guess 'this' means life?...), i have*(you don't need to use past perfect here) already asked many teachers and friends for advice*. It's a shame that i cannot* do it#(not very clear about what the 'it' means.maybe you want to write "i cannot do what they said"/ "I cannot do anything."). But hey, there are A LOT that you can do! None of us human can hold the future. Just try your best okay=] Accuracy is important and so as fluency. Just keep on trying and never never be afraid of making mistakes. I haven't read wan's version and so some of our corrections may be the same. |
| 網主回覆 yap....i must try my best all the time...as i have no choice anymore..
i am never afraid of making mistakes, just there are lots of mistakes i made...omg..
yap...thx both of u ^^
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ching2003111 於 2007-07-16 04:31 PM 發表：
路過的。
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云 於 2007-07-16 12:36 PM 發表：
The weather is especailly hot today.One day, when i was walking under the sun, i said to myself,'in my life, i have been having difficulty in studying. No matter how hard i try, i see myself a failure. It is not in my power to improve my public examination performance. What will i be next year?'
I never wish to live in luxury, nor do i want to live in poverty.I just want to live in comfort without much difficulty.I want a living without great distress.In order to improve this, i have already asked the advice of many teachers and friends. Its a shame that i cannot do it. you haven't asked for my advice ! why dont you call me out and have a tea ?? We can talk and chat about your future path |
| 網主回覆 THANKs a....but i do like jessica format more than ur as she is so detailed and clear¬¬
but anyway, thx u so much a ^^
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