給自已留下回憶的地方
總忘記的事物,永遠忘記不了的事物,
一點一滴都是我的過去,
只想有個地方,能記下我的心裡話,能記下我的回憶。
wl02739176
暱稱: 紗雅雪
性別: 女
國家: 香港
地區: 九龍城區
« July 2026 »
SMTWTFS
1234
567891011
12131415161718
19202122232425
262728293031
最新文章
人生最後的一個暑假
謝謝您多年陪伴我成長...
新的一年舊的開始
拚博的一夜 __ LS IES
沒有愛情的首天
文章分類
全部 (73)
一日多事 (1)
日常記事 (18)
中學生活 (26)
社會問題 (1)
知己好友 (2)
給自已的話 (1)
感情關係 (15)
愛情得著 (1)
與家人渡過的人生 (8)
訪客留言
最近三個月尚無任何留言
每月文章
日誌訂閱
andyet7
好友名單
網站連結
尚無任何連結
最近訪客
最近沒有訪客
日誌統計
文章總數: 73
留言總數: 141
今日人氣: 1
累積人氣: 4265
站內搜尋
RSS 訂閱
RSS Feed
2014 年 2 月 19 日  星期三   晴天


F.4 social issue(teenage smoking) 分類: 社會問題

Social IssueTeenager Smoking


Good morning teacher ,and classmate. I am Aileen of 4D.Today I would like to give a presentation on the topic:Teenage Smoking. Do you know anything about this topic?I hope you can learn more about this after my speech.


To begin with ,i would like to talk about the reason of teenage smoking .first of all,the most of root is peer influence . teenagers want to gregarious with their friends,and maintain friendship,so they try to smoke for example Mary is a good example,when she were primary student,she hadn’t any friend on her school life ,when she grew up ,be a secondary school student ,she wanted to change this problem ,so she join with smoking of teenagers .beside the root is curiosity. Teenagers think this is socialization and adult also smoke ,so they imitate to smoke .last of all, the root is want to releasing tension . For example study pressure ,peer pressure ,and family pressure.

In fact,it brings negative impacts on their health, family relationship and study life. However, smoking is going to damage organ and some tissue, it will let organ increase the probability of cancer, and usually go to toilet. Moreover, smoking is going to make teenagers grumpy,usually dispute with family. Worse still, smoking is going to let teenagers sleepy ,will sleep on lesson, let they not be attention. what's more, it effect our society, it spreads the message the smoking is acceptable. There is nothing wrong about it. To sum up, smoking definitely brings more negative impact than good.

If everyone try to give up smoking , the problem will be solved. Prevention is better than cure. Hence, education is the most effective and universality solution .Youth smoking prevention should organize more talks and cessation service, about the negative effects of smoking . Without doubt, parents should maintain good relationship with them, should find time to chat with their children every week. Finally to put a stop to the problem, the government should adopt a zero-tolerance policy not smoking, for example before 20 years old, must not smoking ,when check out teenagers amercement are foul, it is 1000 dollar.


To conclude, there is a pressing need to look into the matter, the welfare of our teenagers is at stake. We must take immediate action. The parents, government and Young Smoking Prevention should join hand to make a difference. That's the end of my sharing. Thank you.






訪客留言 (返回 wl02739176 的日誌)


TonyJJ 於 2014-02-22 11:21 PM 發表:
Second paragraph:
I am Aileen of 4D --> I am Aillen from 4D.
 
Third paragraph:
I would like to talk about the reason of teenage smoking -->... the reasons for teenage smoking.
The most of root --> doesn't make sense. suggest: chief among these problems is...
When she were primary student --> she was...
hadn't any friend on her school life --> she did not have any friend at her school...
be a secondary school student --> become a..
so she join with smoking of teengers--> so she joined with teenagers who are smoking
 
Forth paragraph:
Goin to damage organ and some tissue --> Going to damage to organs and issues
will sleep on lesson --> will sleep in/during lesson
let they not be attention --> let them cannot pay attention / focus
what's more, it effect our society --> What's more, it affects our society
more negative impact than good--> more negative impacts
 
Fifth paragraph:
If everyone try --> If everyone tries
 
Sixth paragraph
Young smoking prevention should join hand --> ...should join hands
 
Overall: quite good, but pay attention to the minor areas.
[ 回覆 ] [ 封鎖 ] [ 刪除 ]

網主回覆

Thank you ~!!
Posted at 2014-02-25 10:49 PM   [ 編輯 ] [ 刪除 ]



Andes 於 2014-02-21 12:05 AM 發表:
網主文筆不錯喔
[ 回覆 ] [ 封鎖 ] [ 刪除 ]

網主回覆

才不是呢...自己的grammar能力很差~
Posted at 2014-02-22 01:17 PM   [ 編輯 ] [ 刪除 ]


訪客名稱:
電郵地址: (不會公開)
驗證碼:  按此更新驗證碼 (如看不清楚驗證碼請點擊圖片刷新)
俏俏話: (必需 登入 後才能使用此功能)
[ 開啟多功能編輯器 ]