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2006 年 9 月 15 日  星期五   晴天


Third school day 分類: 未分類

Today is the third school day of this academic year. I have almost kept me hand in the campus life. Although Tsing Yi IVE is quite far from my home, its environment is very good. I met YoYo, Chun, Max in the first day. Maybe we will become a good friend forever. I went to campus at 10:00 and had a breakfast at canteen which is the subsidary of Cafe Decoral.
At 10:30, The tutor was not present. YoYo, Chun and me went to tutor room and found our year tutor. We have suspended classes yesterday due to red rainstorm, otherwise we had known the updated time table.
Maths tutor negated his previous changing. We were angry because we need to wait until 13:00.
We played card game at garden and had lunch at a restaurant.
We introduced ourself to fellow classmates at ICT-Project lesson.
After school, I went to Mong Kok and looked for our text bookes.
I claimed the money for buying text bookes at night.
I will re-type chinese  when I free.






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Danny 於 2006-09-16 12:15 AM 發表:
Let me make a rough comment on your article.^.^
Some obvious mistakes are listed in the following:
- kept me hand ---> kept my hand
- we will become a good friend (why can 4 people
make "a" good friend?) ----> we will become good
friends
- we have suspended classes yesterday ---> we had
suspended classes yesterday
- changing ---> changes
- need ---> needed
- ourself ---> ourselves
- bookes (you get it wrong twice) ----> books
- when I free ---> when I am free

Acceptable Fair Good
Readibility --
Understandability --
Organization --
Grammar --
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Very Unfortunate. No Prize for you 
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