與天使摔跤的雅各

2010 年 7 月 28 日  星期三   晴天


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The main aims of the following diary is only to practise my vocabulary and sentences skills.

Thus , there is no necessity to have logical relationship between each sentence.

However ,  I am still eager for  your  comments to rectify  and polish my sentences.

 

 

Everyone has a dream, so do I.

However, due to the torment of time, I have felt my dream was shattered.

Day by day, man becomes veteran.

May be something is predetermined.

No one can foresee, except Him.

No one can induce him.

Subtlety of the world; intricacy of His creatures.

My heart just likes a barren land, hard to produce any crop.






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mynameistakt 於 2010-07-28 11:27 PM 發表:
哈哈~多謝指教~你係陳浩洋?
歡迎繼續俾comment~
因為我想進步~
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小信 於 2010-07-28 04:08 AM 發表:
嘛, 如果係我我會咁寫.

The main purpose of this diary is only to practice my vocabulary and grammar usage.

Thus, the logical relationship between the sentences is not neccessary to exist.

However, I look forward to your comments to polish my sentences. (eager...無啦啦唔會狂熱到要eager for 掛?)

However, time after time I had suffered, I felt my dream was shattered. (torment of time... 時間既痛苦, 我估係我寫既意思呢)

Day by day, a man becomes experienced. (veteran... 如果單字用, veteran 解休老兵, 除非你加veteran of...)

My heart is just like a barren land - no crops can be grown. (land 應該唔會produce crop 架呢... i mean, "製造"或者"生產"係比較人用既動詞...)

其實你冇野寫錯, 只不過可以寫得更好~
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性別: 男
國家: 香港
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